Letters to My LoveDEDICATED: Silently
My Love,
I write to you
to confess
my sins and treason
and the rest.
My love,
I write to you
to expose
these things I've done
that no one knows.
My love,
My first offence
was leaving you.
That's not a loyal
thing to do.
My love,
My second offence
I left you for
a stupid reason,
nothing more.
My love,
My third offence
with your close friend
I had relations
while on the mend.
My love,
My fourth offence
known by your enemy
with whom I fooled
though we wont ever be.
My love,
My fifth offence
was leaving you
I've said that, I know
once wont do.
My dearest Love,
I write to you
to apologise and confess.
Once things are right
my soul will rest.
Copyright Jade Elizabeth
WRITTEN: Monday Jan 26th - Monday February 2nd 2009.
REVISION: Not a revision.
UP FOR REVISION: Yes.
INSPIRATION: How I felt basically.
RELEVANCE: Yes
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Okay so I'm looking for feedback on this one. I feel the second stanza should be in the middle somewhere, like as a "remember this please" idea.
I also think the last one is out of whack, but the flow is off all through it.
Any ideas are appreciated