Bunny Shadows

Bunny

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04:54pm Thu, Aug 20, 2009

Bunny Shadows

There was a fat little bunny,
Who lived alone in a meadow.
Some may find if funny:
She was in love with her shadow.

She knew this dark stranger
By his appearance at night.
Never sensing any danger,
They frolicked by moonlight.

But when the sun rose,
A bigger shadow came.
She ran with him at her toes,
And every day was the same.

Copyright Jade Elizabeth 2009

WRITTEN: August, 2009.
REVISION: Not a revision.
UP FOR REVISION: Maybe.
INSPIRATION: Boredom?
RELEVANCE: Nope

metallica48423

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* metallica48423 hugs Bunny *

Bunny

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LOL Was it really sad?

It wasnt supposed to be sad

metallica48423

Growing Baby Bunny

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It's not sad, but it is.

I don't wanna elaborate

Bunny

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Cause the bunny is in love with someone she cant have? Or chasing a love she cant have? Or running from the love when it gets too big and dark for her?

* Bunny is only now picking up on the metaphors in her own poem (sad really LOL) *

metallica48423

Growing Baby Bunny

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The last one. Or running from a love she's afraid of.

Lunar

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I thought this poem was sweet

Sad I guess, but sweet still ^^

Andre Vienne

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Delightfully short. I'll give it that. Amusing and narcissistic, it fits you well. :3

There's not much wrong with it. It tells a story, it has a good rhyme scheme, it's so short that meter is inconsequential.

Bunny

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Andre Vienne (01:31pm Tue, Sep 8, 2009)
Delightfully short. I'll give it that. Amusing and narcissistic, it fits you well. :3

I'm not narcissistic!!

Andre Vienne (01:31pm Tue, Sep 8, 2009)
There's not much wrong with it. It tells a story, it has a good rhyme scheme, it's so short that meter is inconsequential.

That begs the question: when does meter matter? (go make a help and advice for that one! lol)

Andre Vienne

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I'm going to. I'll do that one first, before I get on to the rest of your poetry and rewrite the stupid icon story that I lost.

But during/after the time I work out my roleplaying game system and novel.

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Jade Elizabeth (Bunny) is a Poet who has made 6253 posts since joining Creative Burrow on 12:15am Sun, Nov 2, 2008. Bunny was invited by No one (creator of this site).

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Jade Elizabeth is an eccentric young woman who enjoys writing stories and poems with hidden deeper meanings. She is quoted saying “Writing to me is not a hobby. It's a passion. It's something that lets my thoughts expose themselves, and my heart shine through where other art could not.”

Commonly her poems are inspired by love or depression, and are dedicated to the people who encouraged the emotion. Given the chance she will readily pull her poems apart, exposing the deeper and hidden meanings behind her words.

Her stories are usually unspoken messages to those close to her – giving every story a hidden meaning. Some things are better left unsaid, or in her case, expressed indirectly through stories.

Jade used to write Documentation for Simple Machines in her free time, but has since begun studying and working, which takes up most of her free time now.

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Romance, Fantasy, and Sad Stories and Poems.

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